The day was morbidly cold, the wind was slowly picking up. Snow was seen everywhere for miles.
It felt as if my hands were frozen to the rifle; as if the rifle itself had
become a part of my body. The wind seemed to sting my exposed face. I tried to
ignore the feeling and focus all my attention on my task. I looked carefully
down the sight. There was nothing to be seen. I had been laying here for what
seemed like hours now with nothing but the insulation of my heavy coat to keep
me warm. I let out a long sigh at the disappointment. Then, just as I was about
to pack up and call it a day, I saw the wolf. I tried to adjust my aim, but I
was too unsteady. I could feel myself starting to get nervous and trembling. I tried
to calm myself down from the excitement of finally seeing some prey in a long
time. I couldn’t let this moment go to waste. I couldn’t wait any longer. I
inhaled deeply and then held it in; my aim was beginning to steady. The wolf
was lined up perfectly now. I couldn’t hesitate any longer; this had to be in
one smooth motion. I took the shot and tried to keep the rifle steady after the
recoil in case if I would have to fire again. The wolf quickly flinched in
pain, and then dropped to ground. I walked over to its corpse in excitement
that I would finally be able to feed my village tonight. I quickly pulled out
my knife and dug it into the wolf’s skin, slowly carving out the amount of meat
I needed. I then placed the large ball of meat in my leather bag, sealed it up tightly, and began
heading back home.
I love the description of 'morbidly cold.' It's so original and something that I can definitely feel as I read it!
ReplyDeleteI was pleasantly surprised at how quick-paced your details were. They were really descriptive, but the story kept moving. =)
ReplyDeleteGreat job with describing the coldness of the scene; I could almost feel the chill.
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job moving your story while still being heavily descriptive. I could feel the cold as I read this.
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